Difference between revisions of "Talk:Atlantis"

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(Brandon)This is so cool!

The story is going to the publishers as soon as I get it at least 250 pages long, or less depending on font size. What size do authors usually use? I am using size 12 right now.

You and I will both need to check it over a couple times to see if it is worthy, and I will make copies to give to other adults I know to see if they have any suggestions, and I will give you some to give out too.

I can't wait until it's accepted, even if it takes a thousand tries, I won't give up (maybe at 10001)

In the meantime, just put any of your awesomest ideas here so we can both read them, and make suggestions

(Will)Hi!!

I have a concern. Completely mind-blowingly awesome as all your action scenes are,i am afraid that we need some sort of plot. It might explain how Matt and Tom met in the first place or there might be some sort personal-life sort of thing about Tom. For instance, Tom might be Holly's boyfriend and they might have met before they were recruited to Atlantis. What were Tom, Matt, Holly, and Scarlett's lives like before Atlantis? Should that be included in chapter two: Flashbacks? For some reason just the whole "I'm Tom and here i am in all these awesome action scenes with an assault rifle on the island of atlantis and yay, look! There's matt, my best friend. Lets go fight! For some reason i know holly and scarlet who are at the head of an elite squadron..." you get my point: we need a plot!!!!!

(Brandon)Yes, your absolutley right. I think we should do like we discussed on the phone, and have them meet at school, when Matt realizes about Tom, etc, huge action scene, etc, then they meet Scarlett via Holly in a government 'camp'.

(Will)Also, on another random note, instead of the atlantis escapade, book 1,2, and 3 how about (for the title)

The Atlantis Escapade: Part I

The Atlantis Conspiracy: Part II

The Atlantis Ultimatum: Part III

Oh, and by the way also, i finished the front cover illustration!

(Brandon) Good idea, and I love the Ultimatum part. Good job on the cover, and we'll fix the motorcycle when you come back.

(Will)New idea. Again, another minor one.

What about Holly carries a H&K XM8 and a FN P90 (search for google images if unfamiliar w/ the p90) as well as two knives in her pockets? Maybe, if we wanted to push it, we could give her some sort of 12 gauge shotgun too and a Glock 20

(Brandon) Good idea, and as we said, scratch the Glock, give her a Pancor Jackhammer, possibly two P90s, and a heavy machine gun version of the XM8.

(Will)As for Scarlet, what about she carries some sort of sniper rifle (i dont know many names of them), grenades, a knuckle knife, a beretta pistol(sorry, handgun, whatever), and either an uzi or an MP5k let me know as soon as you can!!

(Brandon)go with the MP5k, and like we said, the WA2000 or whatever.

(Will)Also, to keep you getting more and more also's, until they never end, i'd like to know what other illustrations you'd like me to do.

(Brandon) To recap (we've already discussed this mostly), the SWAT guy getting out of the SWAT truck, and how about Illustrations of all the guns we use in the story? We could even put little captions underneath telling the statistics, who uses them in the story, stuff like that. Another really helpful thing would be drawings of Dinosaurs (you saw my Ankylosaurus).

(Will)I finally came up with another name for telescape. What about Atlantis: the game? (Brandon) Sure thats fine. I like it.

(Will)What should chapter 1 in The Atlantis Conspiracy be about?

How about tom and matt are together, doing something, when they get the message that Holly and Scarlet's squad has gone missing?

The only question is, what are tom and matt going to be doing before they get the message? (Brandon) sitting back and eating potato chips in the Living quaters (LQ)

(Will)Then chapter two through chapter four will be tom and matt following where holly's squad went, getting captured and using kenesis powers to free themselves of the prison.

I might need some help (urgent) on the action scenes so far, because currently they are pretty dumb.

I know you wont be able to respond for about the next week, so i wont be expecting anything for a while.

And, with my help, of course, we need to aim for each book more about 500 pages, because, since it's a trilogy, not a neverending series, the books need to be fairly long.

See ya!

I've started to try my hand at illustrating some of the American soldiers. Do you want them to have the same helmet as Tom?

(Brandon) No, how about no helmet at all? In all the movies I see, (like Transformers lol) none of the special forces dudes have helmets. Some just have nothing, some might have a camo sweatband, etc.

(Will)I just got an idea for the covers of book 2 and 3. For book two, what about it shows Dr. Shang with a murderous look in his eyes, katanas and glocks and such ready to kill. In a fade-ish background, it would show Holly and Scarlet with handcuffs or something. As for the cover of book 3, it would show Tom closest to you, with Matt, Holly and Scarlett right behind him but still completely visible (you know what i mean; sort of like the cover of the Eragon movie). Then, again in a fade-ish background, there would be the Queen T-Rex roaring. Like the idea? (Brandon) Yeah I know exactly what you mean, and I love the idea.

I got an idea for the plot of the third book. The head honcho for the bad guys (whether that's the Queen T-Rex or some other guy) tells Tom's army in a negotiation that they have a choice- either surrender to the bad guys and meet no harm or die; the bad guys' army is constantly growing and is far from low on reinforcements. The bad guys (sorry, i dont know wat else to call them) decided to make this proposition in a council meeting. That would be why it's called the Atlantis Ultimatum: because Ultimatum means "a final decision"- well, sort of.

(Brandon) Yeah, except the 'good guys' refuse, instead choosing to fight. That will be the main part of the story, where Tom and the gang go and prove their worth to Queen Rex by single handedly capturing every enemy base except the main one, which is the most heavily defended, and so they go to all the other countries for support, almost everyone accepts, and they are about to attack, when Tom is gravely injured in a sneak attack, and Matt takes him to the Guru while Scarlett and Holly defend the newly captured bases. Their Tom learns new powers (yet to be thought of), and learns the only way (which is special) to defeat Queen Rex.

P.S. Remember to check the entire page each time you log on, because I like to respond to questions, etc, right under them, so just check the whole thing.

(Will) i guess u misunderstood me. i meant that the queen rex and her main most highly ranked followers would have a meeting and decide the whole ultimatum deal. (ya know, like you have to surrender or die and all that). then, they would confront tom and gang and tell them, and then everything else will be like you said. obviously they would refuse; i never would suggest that tom would give in.

(will)i finished the first sketch of the matt picture. im at the beach and there is bad internet connection; this is the first time i've been able to use the internet. anyway, about the matt picture, it shows most of his torso. it only shows about half of his body, but i'm sure ill do more matt illustrations anyway. it's not colored yet, but i couldn't bring my art kit, so it wont be colored for a while. it may be a while before i respond again (soooo sorry), so i'll try to get in all i can for now. i found the coolest weapon in my weapons book, although we probably wont use it in our books because it was only used in the 1500's. It's a carbine shotgun with a halberd on the gun barrel and a small butt so it is relatively the same shape as a halberd. there are a bunch of weapons like that and they are awesome.

(will)what about in addition to everything else matt has a usas 12?

(will) i made some plans for atlantis the game. i made a list of all of the types of troopers and heroes on both sides and all of their weapons and attacks (like in battlefront 2)

(Brandon) That's great, but one, you get to go choose your own weapons and stuff for yourself, two, I already have all the different skills and classes, and three, keep in mind its going to be a modern, virtual reality version of runescape, and we wont get to play as the heroes or anything. We will have NPCs (Non player characters) of Tom and the gang, but no one gets to play as them (except us, maybe). The USAS 12, i have a grudge against it cause it sucks so badly. Really heavy, slow reload time, jams alot, etc. A remmington or mossberg with the butt cut off would do nicely though. We can talk more about the layout of the game later, but for now, i can say that it is a free-world type thing like runescape, you can't win, you just play forever if u want, lots of skills and stuff like runescape, except cooler gameplay, and more add ons. Don't try to make it like battlefront 2. And i don't know if you saw, but I wan't all the soldiers to either have Tom's helmet, no helmet, or a camo sweatband.

This really stinks your not here, cause ive' been bored beyond belief the past couple days. Call me as soon as you get home, and we can have a lengthy conversation about anything. I need to talk to someone outside my family about cool things desperately!

(will) it'll be a miracle if i can respond again, but always be hopeful, 'cause i might. see ya!

(will) i started reading maximum ride. it is definitely one of my top five favorites of all time. it's all between max ride, alex rider, harry potter, art fowl, and either eragon or eldest. i just got it a day ago and im already on page 315. yeah, it's that good. i see where u get a lot of the expressions that you talk and write with. i still can't decide if it's better than eragon and h potter.

oh, and by the way, i know how u feel- hey, you were at the beach for a week as well. until i got that book, times where i'm not doing something were no picnic. I wanted to draw Dr. Shang, but i dont have paper and CVS closes at 2:00 in the afternoon. What the f***? my mom wont let me watch the matrix, and all the other movies we have are chick flicks. (like, gilmore girls, garden state, a river runs through it... yuck). But now that i have Maximum ride to read all those problems (except matrix) are solved. and i got yet another idea (sigh****)

how about shangie man wears one of the matrix coats? that would be characteristic.

anyway, i cant think of anything else to say, so see ya. I will be able to respond because the internet is up and running.

Respond!!! Please!!!

(Brandon) Yay! I like the idea with the matrix coats. Keep those ideas coming, cause the more, the better. So now I'm happy you have internet access. I'm also glad you've had a taste of James Patterson, he's my favorite author besides Christopher Paolini. Anyways, I've done a little writing in my book, gotten to the part where Matt comes, and added a couple scenes where Matt and Tom are looking for survivors in the building right after Tom's transformation. I should add a little more use of Tom's new abilities, cause it's kinda like: Yay! Im a superhuman. I slashed a guy. Ok, done, you can be the superhuman now. LOL. On a rather different note, I've stopped even trying to hold together our battlefront clan. no one has joined. Instead, I've made a clan on Runescape, well, it's actually more like a Wilderness group, and I'm training everybody up, etc, and theres' this new thing called clan chat, where it makes it easier to talk with clan members, and you can assign ranks and junk to your clan members. I've already got three recruits, as soon as more of my friends log onto Runescape, we will have more. We'd also like you to join, on my brothers account. We could trust you with it. I gotta go to lunch, but I'll type some more now that you'll actually be able to read it. See ya!